Tuesday, August 6, 2013

Beats

Beats are one of the little, nifty writing terms that aren't immediately understandable...at least they weren't to me. ;-)

But they are so important in dialogue sections that to remove them is to leave a section feeling rushed. Sometimes that is a necessary pace, but usually our dialogue needs to be expanded by those little bits of internal thoughts, body language, and stage direction that tells so much about the characters saying the words. Claire G. at the Books and Writers Forum has created the most amazing exercise for this month that looks at these little bits that make our dialogue flow so much better.

Here's her explanation:

Beats are the words that help form the rhythm of your conversations. They are the information you provide nestled between the dialogue of your scenes as actions, thoughts, and observations.

As you write your drafts, you may or may not be aware of the way your words flow around the dialogue, or of their importance. This exercise will draw your attention to them and make you consider the “micro” detail of what is happening around each conversation your characters hold. It’s an exercise in both editing and craft- one that some will do while they write, but others will not consider until they edit. Either approach is fine.


And here's a bit of my version of the exercise:
(first without the beats)

“Mack, Samantha didn’t tell me much, but she was upset about your class.”
 “Lost my temper.”
 “What did they do?”
 “You know that little hallway between the door and the chorus room? The one by my office?”
“I always wondered who thought a teacher could monitor the hall during class change and supervise the student already in the chorus room.”
“Exactly!” “Four idiots were chicken fighting when I came in after the bell.”
 
(Now with them)
“Mack, Samantha didn’t tell me much, but she was upset about your class.” A crisp wind scattered the leaves along the pavement and tugged at my jacket.
The lights over the parking lot gave me a good view of his face as his jaw tightened.
“Lost my temper.” His hands moved into parade rest as if he were on report.
But teens had a way of causing a lost temper. “What did they do?”
He glanced at me looking for judgment, but who was I to judge a teacher for finding their limit. I knew he’d commanded young Marines scarcely older than his students, but they had signed up for it.
 “You know that little hallway between the door and the chorus room? The one by my office?”
“I always wondered who thought a teacher could monitor the hall during class change and supervise the student already in the chorus room.”
“Exactly!” His face brightened. “Four idiots were chicken fighting when I came in after the bell.”
 
Which one tells you more about Mack?
 
Once I get all of FRIENDLY FIRE together, I'll spend some time going line by line and checking my beats out so that they doing their job.
 
Late breaking news!!!
I've finished my reread of FRIENDLY FIRE. Let's just say that the back third will keep readers turning the pages. So, now all I have to do is fix the front two thirds to get them into the story enough to get there. ; )



 

12 comments:

  1. Argh! I'm really falling behind in Xs! I've wanted to do them all since March, and have only gotten June and half of July done! I think... I think I'll have to start drafting my new story, and use the Xs as prompts!

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    1. Oooh, a new story to draft sounds fun, Deniz!

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  2. Yay! I'm excited you're so close to your goal!

    I grew up in theater, so I'm TOO familiar with beats. The way a line is delivered defines the line. I always act out every scene and explore the emotions/physical indicators of what's going on in the charater's psyche. How do you write truly effective dialog without doing that?

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    1. Chrystal, I hear the dialogue first. In fact, often that's the kernel for a scene. Finding the beats is more of a challenge for me, but I'm finally getting it. ; )

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  3. I've pulled out a scene for the exercise but I'm not sure what to do. I've found I don't really know anything. Sigh, I find that out too much.

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    1. I'm right there with you. I posted mine, but I have no clue yet if I did it right. You're guess is as good as mine. Like I have to tell myself, "Dive in!" ; )

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  4. Thanks for the info, Zan! Can't wait to read your book!

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    1. Janet, it's a long way from being done, but I'm nearer than I've ever been to finishing a novel.

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  5. Sounds like a great exercise. Glad to hear you're making progress on Friendly Fire! :)

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    1. Thanks, Lara. I've finished the reread since I posted this morning. ; )

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  6. Progress yeah! How's the foot? I've always written with beats. It stems back to my haiku writing days. There's a rhythm to writing and dialogue.

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    1. Yes, progress! And I'm happy to report that I started right back in on the beginning the very next day. ;-)

      The foot is much better. I'm already walking full stride again and have gotten up to 6 minutes at a time on the elliptical rider. My hubby is very gratified and delighted. He really encouraged me to fix my foot first before my wrists because he knew how much I hurt. I love the man.

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